For Thursday, find an article about the team/person you chose in class today (Sean Taylor, Giants, Knicks, Jets, Yankees) and list 3-5 ways you would change it.
Material is available at:
ESPN.com
NY Times.com
NY Daily News.com
Sports Illustrated.com
See you in class!
-Mr. Donohue
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Xavier Acevedo Green
http://www.nydailynews.com/sports/football/2007/11/28/2007-11-28_sean_taylors_father_gives_emotional_spee-2.html
1)i would have put what happened to Sean Taylor first
2)I would have put his fathers feeling towards this tragedy.
3)I would have put his other family members feelings.
4)I would have put what happened at the meeting, which Taylor’s girlfriend Jackie Garcia spoke at as well, left Redskins players too emotional to talk to the media before practice
Green
http://sports.espn.go.com/espn/wire?section=nfl&id=3131679
1. I would change the part where it said "He was shot to death" in the intro paragraph... because he technically bled to death.
2. I would also add more about how Taylor's death effected many people.
3. I would add-on more hints that led them to believe what they believe.
4. I would also include more evidence from the crime.
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I would include more evidence from the crime.
I would have put what happened to Sean Taylor first.
I would have put his familys feelings.
http://www.nfl.com/news/story;jsessionid=9A83E9206E0F9BE6608D0861F3074065?id=09000d5d80495e0f&template=with-video&confirm=true
1) The writer should of put some stats of sean taylor to show his accomplishments.
2) Asked more questions about sean taylor to have better quotes.
3) Put quotes on what his future could have been if this never happened
4) what the coach believes
5) the teams words
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